brainstorming #1 for "withering of the boughs" first initial

This first brainstorm has two elements I like :
1) the moon in place of the "i" theta
2) the golden chain attached to the swan

I however feel that while the golden chain is a nice element, to attach it to the swan takes the poem far to literally. The image is stiff and far to static yet, that's why it is the first brainstorm and not the final.